Below we see the rough draft of my Antelope Hill Publishing entry. I would greatly appreciate if you could leave a comment as to what you think works, or does not work, so I can rework it before the deadline. In particular, if you could tell me what you think should be cut out that would be best, as the piece is already five hundred words over the limit. The never ending refrain of “this is a song that never ends,” was repeatedly belted at the unfortunate driver of the flying schoolbus by a pack of children far louder than … Continue reading AH Publishing Contest Entry – Rough Draft